I knew you were not right for me
yet I stayed anyway
why was I so stupid?
my love for you made me blind
you acted like you loved me
treated me like your princess
but when you were alone with your friends
you called me names
behind my back
how stupid I was
to think that you loved me
I should have known
how could I have been so blind
my heart was wrong with you
I've learned from my mistake
I will never trust you again
I've learned my lesson
never will I be stupid again
Author notes
Stupid - Sarah McLachlan
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A contest entry
- SpydurPoet's Family Contest #9 - Music by SpydurPoet.
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Comments
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I hate it when love makes us blind meh!
Calling names behind your back-- how immature and horrible!! SO not worth your time, you are worth more than that xx DD
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Wow if this is true, that is seriously harsh. People can be so cruel. You bring it to light in such a perfect manner though. How someone can cause us pain and somehow we turn on ourselves by blaming ourselves. Weird from my perspective reading this, but at the same time I know for certain I have done this billions of times. Excellent write
and ty for adding me, I am glad I have had the pleasure of seeing your talent.
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totally know the perspective this is from, i have felt that feeling before. Very good good write!
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this is something most can relate to at one point in their life. I love the flow. thanks for taking the time to enter.
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I have certainly been there, more than once. The need for love can be so strong that it's hard not to fall for love's counterfeit.
Look for someone who deserves you. Actually being alone is not so bad either.
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to be honest, this write is about my son's father, my ex. right now i'm with my fiance who treats me better
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That was powerful. You did an excellent job with the song chosen, which I am assuming was Stupid by Sarah McLachlan. Intense take on it.
Thanks for entering the contest & best of luck.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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thanks for your comment. yes, it was Sarah McLachlan's "Stupid"....instead of putting it in the author's notes, i put it under the optional section. i had fun writing it for your contest, sis! thanks for the "honor" ...lol!
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A very snazzy poem. The flow was great but if I may, I think breaking it into stanzas would really give this poem that boost to complete awesomeness.
For example, you could end a stanza at line 3, 9, 12
I think breaking it up after those lines will give you an excellent effect and make it easier for each reader to interpret the movement of emotions and ideals throughout the poem along with the character development. A very good poem with interesting ideas. -
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how's that look?
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Awesome!
I shouldn't have given you help, now you'll beat me in the contest
lol. Now it's absolutely awesome.
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you know our SpyderPoet....she's fair....and i'm sure you'll do well too, my friend....good luck to ya!!!
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Good luck to you too
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SO SAD!
More and more in todays world people use others
They can be so cruel and then so nice when they are with the one they prey upon. Lost is honesty, compassion and sincerity. 
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i totally agree with all you said here. that's the way i felt about my son's father, my ex. it wasn't always like that, but we just were not meant to be. you can't be with someone you don't trust.
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