the porcelain tub
is darker than
her skin,that melts into
the spilled-shampoo stained
edges, morning
day and night --
she watches
the mirrors run
like cheap paint,
burglars lurking
across cracked tile floor,
up overflowing
sides
she jumps
at the sight
of her reflection,
and stability
meanders its way out
of her gasp
Author notes
Inspired by the title "Beauty will be convulsive" and the picture "As Monroe quit" by xMissTake.
A contest entry
- Brevity; image inspired. by Naridill.
600 points, ended November 13, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Shoot.
Comments
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Such talent with creativity. I adore your direction here.
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Thank-ya!
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Really well done -
you manage to grab me from the very beginning.
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Pure talent here, immersed with depth and imagery.
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Thank-you
You are very kind. 
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This is gorgeous, Ryan.
I checked out the prompts that you used and wow...
I can't even pick out a favorite part, it all hit me incredibly hard. This had better win, haha.
Best of luck in the contest
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Wow~
Now this gets the Reader's attention
Powerful images also Emotion that drips
from Your quill~ Love how You begin
the Journey~ and tugs hard to listen
Bravo!
These words:
the porcelain tub
is darker than
her skin
Speaks volumes~...
Keep that quill dancing my Friend
Thank You for sharing Your Voice
Best wishes in the contest~
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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Mmmm, the images in here are so strong. I love it. "Spilled-shampoo stained edges" is gorgeous. I also love the contrast between her watching the mirror run like cheap paint & her jumping at the sight of her reflection. Very well done, Ryan.
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