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Knights of Twilight

The squeak and grind
   Of metal plate scratching

 

The squeal and cries
    Of sword across pavement

Marching out of time
    Spirits and war calls beckon

Unarmored and unarmed am I
    They are coming for my eyes

 

Seen too much--not always what wanted

   Left by all to stand alone

 

I will not hide I will not plead

   Damn sure they will bleed

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  • bachelorette silver member
    November 8

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    This is so full of anger and pain. The sounds and images of the first four lines speak of dejection. This is a very powerful piece! I love the the sounds of the fourth stanza, how it flows off the tongue. There's also a nice turn at the end with the promising revenge. With twelve lines, you've written an extremely emotional poem that actually makes me empathetically feel the pain and loneliness.
    -K