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Last resort

It all happened when my mother died,
My world fell into pieces, horribly undefined.
My vision went blurred,
My thoughts obscured,
My very mind collapsed under the weight of what I heard.

My heart fell into an icy cold lake,
Devoured by sadness, this poem I make,
Turning emotionless,
Feeling so hopeless,
And my feelings keep growing less and less.

I reach for a final last resort,
Something to keep my mind sane.
A shelter, my own impenetrable fort,
And slowly, my obnoxious life, I drain.
My arms cut all over, open wide,
Not understanding why.
I feel the sharp stifling pain subside,
But I can't stop, no matter how hard I try.

The spontaneous death of my beloved mother, left me hollow,
And I was in no way prepared, for that which would follow.
My reddening skin dripping, peeling from my battered flesh,
And my feelings keep growing less and less.

I'm losing what is left of my mind,
Losing all my remaining sanity,
And in the darkness I created, I find,
That what I've become is inhumanity.
Thinking of taking my wretched life,
Thinking of abandoning all,
To get rid of this tiring pain, I strive,
And to paltry Death, ''I heed your call.''

Author notes

Wrote this inspired by the death of the singer's mother, which also inspired the text of Last Resort.

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  • RainShatteredDreams
    November 7
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    loves it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • PerfectlyBroken
    November 6

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    Lovely rhyme. This is very well written and I enjoyed reading it. You made me feel the pain behind the words. My favorite part of this peice is "My heart fell into a icey cold lake,Devoured by sadness, this poem I make, Turning emotionless, Feeling so hopeless, And my feelings keep growing less and less." Excellent entry. Thanks for entering.

    • Joshuavk
      November 6
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      Thanks

      Dang you're fast thanks for the kind words, I just reviewed it and added some imagery =)


      • PerfectlyBroken
        November 6
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        lol I liked the way you had it originally, but the new imagery helped too. Nice job. XD

        • Joshuavk
          November 6
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          Well to be honest, only after I had written the piece did I see it was a contest about imagery >.<'.


          • PerfectlyBroken
            November 6
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            lol I thought it still had imagery in it to begin with. Maybe that's just me though. It's all good though.

            • Joshuavk
              November 6
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              Take a look at Helpless Cycle of Sorrow or The Passing of Time.. I think those have a lot of imagery to it ^^ haven't revised them..

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