Get the troops exchanged, waitin' for change
While Malik is shooting at former friends down the range
Shortchanged on time, don't you think it's strange?
Soldiers unarranged exchange, so deranged
Say he's dead in the mind, then redefined
Fucker's still alive, realigned away from mankind
He won't be consigned and confined to his daily grind
Ruger's aligned in each hand blind to his own kind
Held in hospital beds by the feds
Turn into the reds, givin them the creds
Tires burn their treads to get them meds
All because he unloaded the leads
Man he's lost it all
Crawl to the end of his fall
But he's not one to bawl
Nor will he drawl he's risen to the call
He's been given the ball he's gonna appall
He's got the gall to make the haul
Strides on the mall to bullets install
Tall man shots ring out so small
Make former lives sprawl at the bottom of the hall
He feels no fear and it shows in his leer
This'll end his career but fuck he'll be no deer
Progress never to the rear to the plan adhere
Bandolier emptied to the frontier
Hope that no one interferes with any jeers
Finish the job no more lives left to rob
Shot down every snob in this mob
thinks they're too good to snub
Rub out life he ain't no slob
Just a man with the plan
And it's the way he ran away from Iran
Not gonna go to Afghanistan
Instead he'll kill his fellow man
Author notes
Written just for you MC on the recent shooting at Ft. Hood. My first rap, tell me what you think.
V a n i l l a t a s t i c
A contest entry
- Prewrites. ♥ by GraveyardGoddess.
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Awesome Rhyme and Flow
Vanillatastic!
Vanilla is one of my favourite aromas and flavours - so I'd better add you as a poetry favourite too!
Good luck in the contest. P.S. Great write for a first rap! I look forward to more
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Thanks marandah!
I'm not quite sure why, but I absolutely love this so much. I'm sure you heard about the shooting at Ft. Hood Texas just a few days ago, and this was my response. This definitely was just a flow from my brain to the computer, without me really thinking about what I was typing, and I absolutely love the way it came out. When i imagine a big black guy rapping it instead of me, a white 16 year old guy, it's much better in my head.
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