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Our Balloon

Spring unfurled against the heat of summer
To fast bring renewal round to tempt fate;
Till finally the truth became drummer

Silently showing we soon would deflate.

Shared balloon predisposed to pop;
Your hue was beautiful as it shone here
With vividness proved more than merely prop
While we shared this universe minus fear.

In seasons forward of feigned forever
I dream of then as if it were true now
And from such thoughts I wish to leave never.
Though that is something the world won't allow.

I pretend our balloon still exists round
With perfect longevity to astound.

 

 

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  • poets whisper
    November 12

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    As sonnets go this is exceptional. Rhyme scheme and syllable count seem right on and the meaning is clear. I really like the last two lines. Sometimes pretending for awhile helps gentle the descent of the balloon. thank you for entering the contest.

  • beautiful sonnet I wish you would write more sonnets they are my fav.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 7

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    Aww... just beautiful bro!

    I'm sorry I've not been around, I've missed your writing


  • Sonya-Erasmus silver member
    November 7
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    This is wonderful!
    So heartfelt and soft.
    Brilliant write.
    Love
    Sonya


  • Cannonsfire
    November 6
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    Softly stunning Bro C


  • rainbows. gold member
    November 6
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    oh my.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 6
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    softly engaging and ever-so-innocent

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