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Pretty Little Time Bomb

I'm a pretty little time bomb,
waiting to expload,
all the hurt and pain i feel,
the new ones and the old.

I'm getting dizzy,
loseing grace,
i feel that i will fall,
i think i've fallen out of place,
maybe i've lost it all.

Now i'm just waiting,
in the dark,
sitting near,
my broken heart.

I'm a pretty little time bomb,
waiting to expload,
so just push me a little more,
and i will blow my load.

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268. Pretty Little Time Bomb

A contest entry

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  • Sara Khan
    November 17
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    It's such a beautiful poem. You expressed your feelings so wonderfully.

    ...just push me a little more
    and I'd blow my load....
    I'd not push, my sweet lady! I'd pull you towards myself. That would make us both happier.


    • Jaffa-
      November 17
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      That's really sweet.
      Thank you very much for the comment and support ^^


  • Unbreakable3
    November 7

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    nice

    i like this. a good quality peice with good emotion. thank you very much for entering the contest and best of luck and blessings always.