Joe wanted me to loosen
up, so that's what I tried to do.
I shook my hips to the beat
of the drum and tried not to fall.
I usually failed
at this task, but nonetheless I tried.
Dancing was not my thing and when I tried
such things on my own, I was never so loose
with my movement and I usually failed.
But I felt that I needed to do
this for Joe and so I did my best not to fall
as I moved to the beat.
The quicker the beat,
the harder I had to try
not to trip and fall
flat on my face. My clothes weren't loose
enough for me to do
this well without failing.
But in this case, failure
was not an option. Joe needed me to keep with the beat
of the music, or all I could do
at the dance with him was try
to slow dance, and with a loose
dress on I would probably fall.
I can't count the number of times I fell;
but at least in the end I learned something. I didn't
fail completely--I learned the value in loosening
up my body as the beat
got faster and with that accomplished I just had to try
to move around and maybe I could get something done.
It wasn't easy to do.
But at least the more I fell
the harder I tried
and the less I failed.
When the beat
sped up, my movements loosened.
Try as I might, however, dancing isn't something I can do.
Loose is something I have never been and I really got sick of falling.
Eventually I quit and Joe said I failed. I think I was just dancing to my own beat.
Author notes
Words used: loose, do, beat, fall, fail, try
Based on a poem I wrote two years ago about an actual experience I had shortly before my junior prom.
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A contest entry
- Sestina Contest! by KnightOfTheRose.
1500 points, ended November 25, 28 entries
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Very nice job on this. I don't require iambic pentameter but it would have been nicer if the line lengths were similar. I did enjoy it though
Thank you for taking the time to enter. Excellent work and I wish you the best of luck in my contest
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Nice experience
A nice experience wonderfully expressed through Sestina
best wishes,
Mou :-) -
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thank you very much! ^_^
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This one is fun abd good.
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thank you very much!
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This was a little different than what I'm familiar with but I like the ending.
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Sestinas are a trip to write, this one I read with delight.. as I a dancer ne'er will be, yet with my fingers now, I dance with words, unfettered free...
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Thank you for the encouragement!
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