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Autumn in Eden

Autumn’s solitary moon, the night’s solemn chill

Freezes and illuminates countless tears.

Smothered beneath decaying foliage

Was once a blooming dream of happiness.

Now, like this season, it withered into a another color

Painted with sorrow’s hue, again I’m expelled from Eden.

Author notes

I haven't written in a very long time so this might not be my best.

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  • Amazon Huntress
    November 8
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    :)

    Subtle, delicate images. Love the picture you paint, and the closure is perfect.
    *~Huntress~*


  • blueyez
    November 7

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    it conveys sadness and emotion from within... that's good poetry!

  • fearlesslyBroken
    November 6
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    hmm this is really good. "again i'm expelled from Eden" i love that. its so thought out. good luck!