Spiritless and dreaming of a way out,
but the hope of escaping the dungeons
dim throughout the forestry and misery.
The wishing, all of the innocence of a
malevolent creature, soon realizes the
epic failures it has conquered and consumed.
Cut deep and the resistance fading, my
empty torment continued to abuse me,
until it was time for me to stop trying.
The skies bled with my blood, telling me
to give up and soar above the clouds to
another planet in the universe's boundaries.
I felt myself drowning in hatred, wanting
revenge and to inflict all of those desires
that those torturous beasts set upon me.
The loss, the extrapolated misery of a time
gone through the sands of the hourglass, will
be avenged, even if I have to gain an hour or so.
Inspiration of the skies that bleed from my
wrists spill with black acidic rain, hatefully.
Death's Prayer reigns down with unknown possibilities.
Maybe we'll survive, maybe we'll all fade away into
the oblivious darkness most would envy, but would
you fade with me if that ever happened, my friend?
Author notes
All Words Used
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A contest entry
- Rounds Quickie #2 by Tinselpool.
1550 points, ended November 18, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I want criticism please. Constructive would be great.
Comments
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Well done indeed for using the whole wordbank. That's not easy. This was quite heavy reading, but in a very good way
A dark piece that gets the reader in. Congratulations on your trophy
gaylene
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wow
you seem to be quite ina starit jacket of thoughts quite self made and inflicted.....it is not physical and reala nd just imaginary prison..I hope...the latter can be broken..and the former is a force -
The skies bled with my blood, telling me
to give up and soar above the clouds to
another planet in the universe's boundaries.
brownie points for using the whole word bank! thanks for sharing, it was inspirational and just plain beautiful. thanks for entering, and good luck to you.
claire -
use at least five words in the word bank. take it where you will. good luck.
spiritless
wishing
trying
epic failure (counts as one)
hope
empty
continue
torment
give up
soar
above
realize
skies
deep
thanks, claire
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