You hold my heart across so many miles,
as words in carbon ink express my soul,
in longings you will come and make me whole,
and let my eyes regard upon your smiles.
No roses can I send across these isles,
to say I love you with my heart and soul,
the feelings are so real, beyond control.
Behind the screen as common sense beguiles,
I question if you even read one word,
or catch my kiss upon a winter's breeze?
I wonder if my love will ever care,
when trysts of thought are really quite absurd,
yet still you hold my lonely heart with ease,
and wander where my dreams can only dare.
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cara Ti
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A contest entry
- Unrequited Love Sonnets by poets whisper.
900 points, ended November 12, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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It seems fine although I expected to see ABAB ... which it would be if the lines were just reversed:
You hold my heart across so many miles,
in longings you will come and make me whole,
and let my eyes regard upon your smiles.
as words in carbon ink express my soul,
Maybe this is a variation on the type of sonnet I had in mind ... maybe I need to be more specific. Thank you for entering. The wording is beautiful.
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This is an accomplished piece of work - articulate, intelligent and well-fashioned. First class.
Bill
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beautiful sonnet and words of unrequited love. A joy to read as it flows
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*sigh
Very well done, Jem.
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Really beautiful. Not everybody can make a sonnet flow as well as this. I know I can't, but I do enjoy the form when well written.
Many clappies
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Very lovely. I feel the longing in this sonnet, which sums up very well with the very strong line, "and wander where my dreams can only dare."
Best of luck in the contest.
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What a sense of longing- unrequited love portrayed so well. Is there anything you can't write? So lovely!
Best wishes in the contest!
Kris
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HA HA, I wish!
Thank you Kris.
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