Maine gulaboun se ekh din phocha...
kya meri mohabbat se to khubsurat hai
gulaboun ne kahaa, Aie KHuda ke bande,
Humko Usne baanaya, hum be hassien khubsurat hain
teri mohabat teri afsana hai
Mere gumse Maine kaha, ae gulaab...
itna aithbaar mut ker.
tere daamn me kaantein basaie hai.
meri mohabbat ke aagun main nahin
Phir maine phocha asman ki aur chand se,
kya meri mohabbet teri chandni se maulayem hai
Chand ne kaha, Aie khuda ke bunde
HUmko aus ne banaya, meri chaandni be haasien mulayam hai
teri muhabbat teri nazzakut hai...
Mere gumse Maine kaha, Ae chand...
apne chandni pe ithna guroor muth ker
teir chandni ke sager main daag chupe rehtain hai
meri mohabbat mein nahin..
Phir maine suraj se phocha,
kya meri muhabbat teri roshani be zaayada roshan hai
aur usne kaha, ae khuda ke bunde
Humko ausne banaya, humari roshni be hassien hai
teri muhabbat tuje tukh hi hassien hai
Miane kaha suraj se, ithna khamund apni roshni mein mut ker
tere roshan baden mein aag hai.
meri muhabbat mein nahin
Bai shuk main khudaa ka bundaa houn,
meri mohabbat bhi usi ki tho hai..
Bus meri bebassi meri mohabbat mukamil
mere pass nahin, mere saath nahin
meri mohabbat mein kaante nahin,
lekin mere phool kabool bhi nahin.
Meri mohabbat main daag bhi nahin,
lekin uski chaandni kabool nahin
Meri mohabbat mein agg nahin,
lekin uski roshani roshan nahin...
main ab kise kya phoochoun,
jab mere koi sawaal ka jawaab nahin
Jiske liye yeh mohabbat liy phirta hoon
]usiko hum kabbol nahin
Author notes
this is one of first urdu hindi poems, its kinda written in a slang.
i have re written this in english.. not an exact translation but a re write in english
here is the link..
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3673866
A contest entry
- Azaaad nazmain/free verse. by fatizeh.
750 points, ended November 21, 14 entries
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dil ko chhoo gaya
aapki yeh kavita padhne walon ke dilon ko beshak chho jaati hai..mohabbat mein mile dard aur tanhai ka aapne bahut hi badhiya pradarshan kiya hai is kavita hai..
meri fav lines hain:
"Bai shuk main khudaa ka bundaa houn,
meri mohabbat bhi usi ki tho hai..
Bus meri bebassi meri mohabbat mukamil
mere pass nahin, mere saath nahin
meri mohabbat mein kaante nahin,
lekin mere phool kabool bhi nahin."
aapke hunar ki main taarif pure dil se karta hun..
good luck for the contest!
~Parth.
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bhut khushi huwi ke apne nazam perhi aur iskeder sarhaiee ... mein apke is hausla hafzai ka main bhut shuker guzar houn...
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Wording = 6 out of 10
Theme = 7 out of 10
Idea = 6 out of 10
Title = 6 out of 10
Style of Poetry = 7 out of 10
Language = 16 out of 25
Mental Depth of the Work = 17 out of 25
Total are 65 out of 100
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Awww
Beautiful
I completely understand hindi but I somehow can't write in Hindi . What you have penned here is truly beautiful .
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I am also kinda limited with hindi.. I can understand but when it comes to write words just dont show up.. so is my arabic
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i forgot to add ..thanks for the applauds
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acha hai
bohat khoobsurat likha hai...Allah apko kamyabe se humkinar keray
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ye ek bohat acha write hai.shukriya for entering
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Bahut sundar
Bahut accha likha hai aapne, sampurn rup se bauddhik, aapko iss pratishpardha mein safalya hetu shubh kaamnayein
very well written, full of wit, best wishes for the contest
Mou
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Meri is shothi si nazam aap ne islayak samjah aur sara-ha. Mujhae bhut khushi huwi.. Is hausla hafzai ka main bhut shuker guzar houn.
thanks for the applauds and the comments
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I understand come of the words for all the Indian movies I see and songs I hear. That's about it.
Good luck in the contest
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lol... yeha indian movies.. if you understand songs of bollywood then this poem is easy..
thanks for ur sweet comment sarah and applauds -
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It is a little easier when you hear than when you attempt to read; but, I understand what you mean!!
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