It's not quite pain when you're away,
Pain is a hurt, short like the word,
And when you've cried out it's over and gone,
It's subtler than that, you're an ache I wouldn't be without,
You're so beautiful and bright, your face glows like a little star,
I tingle when I stroke your chin, I hold you so gently tight,
When you fade I can't see at all,
You drift out of mind as we return to our lives,
Mine's grey, or nearly, washed out and pallid,
A short space with few colours, compared to the world,
Your giggles always tickle my view so beautifully,
Into silly rainbows and funny hues,
I miss that,
Wonder is that we can laugh at socks,
More than eat by candlelight,
We've never seen a movie-ever, the time we have we like to talk,
And touch and be,
Time is only bright memory when it soars,
When we are outside of time, my eyes are yours to hold,
And you are mine - by some indulgent fate,
He smiles when he see's you laugh, but time is cruel,
Christ I miss you, and your smile - cliché but so true,
You light me up with your little white teeth,
Darling where are you?
One hundred and thirty miles away,
I could in all honesty go right now,
I could rise from this chair and walk into the wet,
Into the cold dark with purpose,
Excitement and surety, it would feel so right,
You'd dance in my eyes on the roads,
A few hours later I'd be gliding in slowly,
Calmer yet twisted with nerves,
I'd imagine you until you'd called out my name,
And you'd jump on me,
I'd smile as your eye's made sparkles in mine,
And forget all the reasons I nearly stayed,
I'd remember what makes me sure that I'm happy,
And clean my head of thoughts,
I'll remember one day when I finish the drive,
I'll remember the smile on those lips,
You're a world in an eyelash, meaning in a blink,
And writing alone is nothing like bliss,
I need your hand in mine when I drive - dangerous and yet so alive,
What is life worth if you sit at home,
And worry about the love of your life?
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Sorry to be a bother but it destroys the rules lol jk but it does break them. It's far to long, nothing over 30 lines, the rules per promt are listed.
Also you didn't tell me which prompt you used. Sorry Sorry.
HOWEVER I know how it is when you get carried away on a prompt and just keep writing, I run into it alot. It is a beautiful write, just to lengthy for the rules. Terribly sorry, I'm going to DQ because I wouldn't want you to write it over. Taking stuff out of it would take away from the impact. Please when you get around to it, another entry, hopefully as good, though not as long, as this one.
-Katie
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Oops! sorry! - did get abit carried away and completely forgot about the length restriction,
Will likely enter a different (and shorter) piece!
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It's all good lol I do it too and thanks for not being angry and hating me lol. I hate having to DQ, people get mean.
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what's the fun in that?
entered a very different and Much shorter one i've just written - hope you enjoy it
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This is a worthy reply to the contest prompt, a treatise on the beauty and mercies that love has to offer us all. Good luck in the contest, Poet. 
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