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Lost Love

An end to dreams when love is lost
And life no more is as it seems,
No recall once this line’s been crossed,
            An end to dreams.

Here I have gone to sad extremes
For she, young love, once vainly tossed
Away to follow lust’s vile schemes.

With sorrow is my heart embossed,
As I pursue my arcane themes,
With pencil lines I’ve crossed, crisscrossed
            An end to dreams.

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a roundel...

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  • Cinara
    November 8

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    Line two struck a vubant chord, and yes this is a different theme for you. I know there is so much of life just waiting to be written by you. Well done, master poet


  • XLadyElinorX
    November 7

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    aha, this is different than your usual, Mike my friend... may I question the master poet's statement that it's a rondel? As far as I've read, the rondel is different from the roundel, which is what I think you meant... well done on this - I like the line "With sorrow is my heart embossed," and I like the refined simplicity of this poem; it doesn't require much to understand the feeling behind the words... sad, indeed

    ♠ Lady Elinor

  • Purrsanthema
    November 6
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    How very very sad. I love your arcane themes. And the narrator's as well.


  • Darmok
    November 6

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    depature

    I love the departure from your regular genre; excellent writing. That first stanza was spot on - a universaly truth!

    Darmok


  • Darianna
    November 6

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    ? What's wrong with this? I don't see anything wrong with it! It's a sad theme though!

    Dari xxx

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