Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Lady Paradigm

Consider the spring - a season of time,
A wonderful thing, when all becomes new.
The season of birth a fresh paradigm  
And here on this Earth, a time to renew.

Then spring turns to summer, changing this globe,
Like a musical strummer, caressing your ears;
Or a beautiful woman changing her robe
In a merciful dance dissolving your fears.

Then lo and behold she changes her smock
And blossoms grow old in the autumn of time.
Her colors will change as we move back the clock
It’s all become strange, she’s now in her prime.

Next comes the season, the lady must rest;
There’s always a reason things come to pass.
A winter now gleams with things she loves best,
With paradigm dreams through this hourglass.

 

 

Author notes

So many season poems seem to make one of the seasons darker than the rest. I tried to break that rule.

In a list

A contest entry

Comments:

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 19 of 19

  • Peripatetic gold member
    November 17
    ?
    Edit | Reply
    Each of the seasons has its appeal in this poem. Read aloud each quatrain seems to have a variable rhythm. We skip into each one like an excited child and then read more slowly like an enchanted child who stops to look more carefully for the grace beneath the surface beauty.

    The motif a lady in her seasons also gives us the sense of looking through the photo album of a beloved matriarch. We see her from youth to maturity to fullness of years in the grace and beauty of each season of her life.


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    November 9
    ?
    Edit | Reply
    for all things alive and new upon the seasons and then in times of rest for these four seasons give time a test.. i love this and the content.. stunning piece of wisdom and rhyme well don hun hugs Angel♥


  • HaleyMary
    November 9
    ?
    Edit | Reply
    This is beautiful, Amera. I like how you described each season. It reminds me of how beautiful life is and of how sometimes the most simple things like the seasons can bring joy and wonder to the world. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • awannabepoet
    November 8
    ?
    Edit | Reply
    Most excellent piece of rhyming poetry as always, I always leave your page with a Smile Amera and this is no exception.

    Great poem.


  • Ken-Maverick
    November 7

    Edit | Reply
    Your rhymes are always a pleasure to read,
    "There’s always a reason things come to pass.
    A winter now gleams with things she loves best,
    With paradigm dreams through this hourglass." <---Loved this ending
    All the best to ya in the contest dude.

    Ken


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 7

    Edit | Reply
    Just a couple of things, Sis. Line 9 "lo" without a "w" please. The other thing - throughout the poem you have the change of the seasons personified as a lady changing her clothes, and yet the only capital letter you employ is on "Globe"; I think that sits rather oddly, and maybe you should lose it.

    Apart from that, it's a lovely concept, and the treatment is light and rhythmic. Not bad.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 6

    Edit | Reply
    Aw smooth transitions. Very nice.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 6

    Edit | Reply

    i think..

    you have succeeded..this is amazing my dancing queen of form.
    excellent as per usual lady..

  • Purrsanthema
    November 6
    Edit | Reply
    Lovely, absolutely lovely!


  • Desire gold member
    November 6

    Edit | Reply

    Oy~

    Love this form You have penned in and just flows like a waterfall
    and how thirsty I become to hear more~
    You took the prompt and brought balance which also brought a
    smile also new outlook towards the next season
    Beautiful this is like You~
    Woot~ Adore the words: The season of birth...
    Happy Happy Joy Joy!! Swells the eyes~

    Keep that quill dancing Form Queen
    Thank You for sharing Your Voice
    Best wishes in this contest ~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~

  • LovingPhoenix
    November 6

    Edit | Reply
    Oh my what a beautiful write! Each season is one to be cherished and appreciated in it's own right, and you have captured this so beautifully! Good luck in the contest.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 6

    Edit | Reply
    You have given Mother Nature a beautiful personality with a poem that flows and rhymes perfectly.

    All the best in the contest.

    Love
    Sue

  • Topnotchsy
    November 6

    Edit | Reply
    Your Author Notes are very true, and it is nice to see a poem that views the seasons in a slightly different light. Impeccable form as always.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 6

    Edit | Reply
    deliciously contrasted rhyme schemes and very upbeat take on the theme

    I love it when you set the bar high



    Jeff


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 6

    Edit | Reply

    My own favorite season has always been autumn - I love sweaters, stew simmering on the stove and a fire blazing on the hearth. But, of course, each season has its own charm and endearing ways. This is a beautiful answer to the prompt, Sweetie. Good luck in the contest, my Friend.




    • Amera gold member
      November 6

      Edit | Reply
      Thank you so much my friend. I'm honored that you took the time to read my poem. I know how much work you have to do judging all those contests. I hope my dropping out of the one with sixty some entries helped you.


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    November 6

    Edit | Reply

    Sublimely composed...


    Every word is a flower, all lines are boughs of the tree of wonder, where the birds of beauty sing to Nature, and hummingbirds are fed with nectar of creativity... "Lady Paradigm" is pure harmony of a song played by a seraphic musician.

    I am grateful to the author of "Lady Paradigm" for showing us what writing in major art means in Poetry ~ through the majestic lines of this poem.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 6

    Edit | Reply
    interesting, i have often found that people and the seasons relate, esp with woman, so this image was not hard for me to see, it was a wonderful read of a marvelous poem, please keep it flowing

1 - 19 of 19