Corroded shackles bind me eternally to
Skeletal walls and whispers of deceit reverberate
As I spiral into uncharted voids of woe.
Shadows cast vengeful grins across unkempt floors,
Laughing at my weakened attempts to break free;
To attain my redemption once again.
When the rust erodes the chains;
When I escape, when I leave this place behind-
I will have known tranquility, and I will have
Become stronger through it all.
But the ruination of the past, it plagues me-
The torture I find unbearable, I beg of them
To cease, to fade away but the torment...
It perseveres.
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Written on November 6th, 2009.
-Sadien-
Author notes
Prompt #5. Bounded in Chains by the Shadows of Past Ruination
For the title I basically re-worded the prompt, as the poem is about the prompt anyways.
Drawing inspiration upon past inflictions to write this one.
A contest entry
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Yays...
I remember when you wrote this, it was when you were coming off your case of writer's block. I get it and probably understand it more than anyone else on here, as I was living some of it out with you. Thumbs up, sweetie.
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Thanks love.
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Great write...
Corroded shackles bind me eternally to
Skeletal walls and whispers of deceit reverberate
As I spiral into uncharted voids of woe.
WOW what a great start.. I loved this piece...
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Saderz, I am so damn jealous of your vocabulary. =[ It's o-mazing and junks, and oddly beautiful, as most of your dark writes are.
And I just want to remind you that you ARE a stronger woman now. *hugs* It might take a while to get over your past - and you'll always have those memories no matter how hard you try - but you've come such a long way already. And never, everevereverrr forget that I'm here if you need to vent. I know we don't talk a lot, but yer'. [ Head nod action.;
Buuuut, it's late, and I can't think of anything else to say.
Best of luck in the contest, dear. ♥
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Haha. I'm pretty much healed through everything I've been through lately. But sometimes for prompts like this, I like to go back into that pain and draw from it in order to write about the prompt.
*hugs* ♥
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