As she walked along the rugged mountain path,
She thought about the situation she was in.
The man she had loved with all her heart,
Had left her, pregnant, alone and no where to go.
Feeling chilled, she hastened her steps,
Hoping to reach her destination before the light faded.
How could she have been so trusting, so blind?
When had he become so insensitive, so deceitful?
At least the relationship had been fruitful in one way.
She felt so jubilant at the thought of the new baby.
If only the feeling had been contagious,
If he had caught it, things could have been so different,
She would not be alone, no place to go, no one to call.
What was her next step?
Author notes
I used all of the words.
A contest entry
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Comments
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This is a sad step sp pften taken by women when they
pour their heart out and share their love. They areleft standing all alone and no place to go...mac
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awe so sad
It's so true for many of many women today the man walks out and leaves the responsibility to her and pregnant with no one to turn to. I love the way you brought out the concept of your write we can be deceived. Great job Darlee!
Blessing!
Sharon
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Oh wow your poem is great. Oh it's so sad that this unfortunately happens way to often. Pregnant and all alone to raise the precious baby. Hopefully the woman in the poem finds Jesus and then she won't ever have to do it alone. Great little story written into a poem. Fabulous and best wishes in the contest.
Wishing You Many Blessings,
Much Love Always,
Kellle Marie
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I think her next step is to pray and rely on God. Great job on the poem.
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this is awesome Darlee I love the way you took this prompt heartfelt in story well done always Hugs Angel♥
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This was a great write and you did good using all the words and you didn't have to make it extremely long to make it make sense. Great write. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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A SAD AND OFTEN TRUE STORY
It seems more and more in this world this is an experience which is happening more and more. Families seem to be a thing of the past as our society keeps on in this fateful direction.
As I read I was reminded of a song sung by BJ Thomas, its title is ROCK AND ROLL LULLABYE. 's
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This would be a sad and depressed state to be in for sure. I love your poem. Thank you for the opportunity to read it. I love your front page too.
Brook -
what a sad but too much a reality for many young girls these days, best of luck in the contest , a wonderful poem
Sean
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