I dread my history, but I live in the past
Only cause the best things, Never really last
We say forever, but we never really mean it
Holding onto words, just because we need it
Everything breaks, none defeats time
Our will is weak, both yours and mine
We dream of the picture, perfect as can be
We blind ourselves, with what we want to see
Opening eyes, to the truth can hurt
Bury our lies, fill it with dirt
Spread it around, so our past won't rise
But farewell, is never goodbye
What we do, both now and then
Stays with us, till the end
So you can look straight, pray for what's to come
And you can try to forget, forget where you're from
However, every move, and what you do
They all stay, they all stay with you...
I dread my history, but I live in the past
Only cause the best things, Never really last
Author notes
A little spill on my mind...
What did you think
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We blind ourselves, with what we want to see
Um? Simply Wow. This line has such an apparent truth and somehow, it hurts as the same time.
♥amber
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Indeed, it does.
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hehe I like coming up with lines similar to that. Ones that somewhat contradict one other, but makes sense..... haha ...if that make sense
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wow did we both write a 'past' poem on the same day or within a day of each other? hmmmm i like this though good job hun
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It is so deep and true.
It is really an eye opener to some deep thoughts, yet truths. It has a great rhyme scheme but the cadence is off in a couple places. You could try replacing nothing with none in the third line. In the eighth line I think it flows slightly better if you cut out the word up and just make it, fill it with dirt. Same concept in the twelfth line you can get rid of very and it seems to flow better. For emphasis at the end repeat they all stay;
They all stay, They all stay with you
Overall it is extremely well written expressing a concept of the mind versus reality and involves a lot of thought. It is among my favorite's. Great!
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I'm not sure what sparked this write to be honest. I had the first two lines written down a few days and I wanted to branch off with something that stayed true to those words and came up with this. Overall I'm pretty satisfied how it turned out except for the fact that it's shorter than I wanted.
But I appreciate you for your input and I did in fact make the changes that you suggested which I also thank. It makes the flow better and sound more natural with the minor adjustments.
But again thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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The past...
Wow, can relate in more ways than one. I think that this is in everyone, something in the past that they can't let go and if they can, they will always remember.
That's my problem. Always going back into the past. Well I can relate, so good job! XD
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