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She waited with clouds, but the wind wouldn't cease.

Missing image

 

 

 

he was feather

to feminine features,

tempting torso

with the whim of his wish

 

against buds,

to bloom

and sigh.

 

until he tainted wings,

taunted tips

and thighs

and spread her yellow morns

to nearly-naked...

 

thus shredding

the seams

that stole her.

 

she sings survival now

to newborn highs,

whilst his corneas collapse

beneath last season's

harvest.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Used the first image for inspiration.
Credit:: http://mirabiliaimages.deviantart.com/
Image title: Do birds dream

this isn't typical me and yet it is (this is me without skin).

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  • Ryno
    November 13
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    Beautiful and captivating from the very first. Powerful imagery and device. Well done! Grats on the Silver cup!


  • Naridill gold member
    November 13
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    Poetically moving! A stunning captivation.

    I wondered if at end - 'neath, or beneath.

    Even so, this piece spoke numbers to me, it read the image but induced something much more enriching.


  • CollegeQueer
    November 10
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    I very rarely write sensual poetry as I can never speak it right. You have done so amazingly in this piece. I love the imagery. If I can't see what a poet is explaining, it will be harder to piece the poem together entirely. Thank you for your comments on my poetry and I will look forward to reading more of your pieces.

    <3Nate


  • LadyLavender gold member
    November 9

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    Laura this is you without skin...well its amazing!

  • SoulWhispher
    November 7

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    Most powerfull poem that moves the reader with hidden emotions, your words weave a most profound poem, great job, love with blessings John


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 6

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    This is such a tender and sensual penning, Poet. Quite the lovely reply to the chosen prompt. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie.




  • jazzcat gold member
    November 6

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    Beautiful. Excellent metaphors that allow us to create these images in our heads; the tone and pacing are perfect for this piece -- I read it three times through and got more out of it everytime. Excellent writing. Good luck in the contest.

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