Day dreaming in crowded café,
sipping on a cold coffee.
Drinking dregs from a cheap cup,
staring at a looking glass.
I am totally transfixed,
observing the shifting scenes.
Everything looks so surreal,
like a tiny twilight zone.
Reality's reflected there,
and yet nothing there is real.
The mirror mimics my moves,
showing only obvious things.
I see myself gazing at myself,
wondering which will blink first.
Finding faults fascinating,
all are swiftly scrutinized.
Within worlds of sleek shadows,
empathy exists for free.
A voyeur’s view, watching as proper
prim puppets, pontificate.
A contest entry
- BWOW~~Best Write of the Week~~#26...with aboomer, and Starz of Heaven by islekine.
700 points, ended November 15, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I much enjoyed this. Great wording and imagery made it easy to 'see'.
nicely done!
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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I liked this one here the last stanza very nice close to this poem thanks for entering our contest best wishes to you in our contest have a great weekend be well.
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Great imagery and feelings...
I like the surreal aspect...tiny twilight zone is great! Thanks so much for sharing your talent! Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on! I hope to see your work again!!
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I enjoyed reading this poem.
Clever: 'I see myself gazing at myself,
wondering which will blink first.'
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"Finding faults fascinating,
all are swiftly scrutinized."
Gob-smacking.
Wonderful vocab throughout, so vivid.
Clap clap. <3
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can I say OMG? LOL, I always hesitate to use those three letters, even more so , the words...but this poem is so amazing. I would have loved to have been there with my camera recording the actual happening, as I am assuming this was a real life experience, which always makes the best of poems, I think.
I loved every word of this! The last stanza really brings it all together, and I especially like the line " empathy exists for free".
Kudos!
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