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Today's lack of Humanity ( Gold )

 

 

 

In threads of tangled web

spun silk opens her pores

absorbing dew to the rise of shadowed moon

her frailty of mind can only conclude

confused state of humanity

lesser  the bullet's prey.

 

 

 

Author notes

Six lines of anything ..

Just a sad feeling of how I viewed the news of today

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    November 9

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    This was brilliant;
    just magnificent.
    You pack so much depth
    into these 6 lines,
    it reads like a story.

    Sis, I love it!!!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • sgking123
    November 8

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    wow

    this ran the whole gamut from the web..to pores to bullet.....did she web a wrong one and got that violence.....guess this was the meaning of this short and intense piece..love dit even if the meaning did varya bit


  • Nevel
    November 7

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    I'm glad you are not indifferent....powerful lines here..."bullet's prey" ...yeah....I love the moon-line here..wonderful imagery here...
    Erwin


  • Topaze gold member
    November 6
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    Very well done a lovely piece, my best wishes.

  • Bob Fox
    November 6

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    Julie

    A true condemnation on life and todays society. We seek out our man made gods and dally in their significance. nd when the world goes to shit we ask why> Smile poet your words are in need.


  • penman gold member
    November 6
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    powerful

    Aww, i think we all feel that way at times, so sad. hope things improve for you

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