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Beautiful world

In my mother's womb,
I was safe and sound,
though my room was dark,
Just insearch of light,
I was born,Oh God!!!
Insearch of light, a spark!
I wandered all around
this world,a beautiful world,
A beautiful world, I thought,
Oh! my Good God,
Oh my God!!!

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  • Oh.My.Juliet
    November 9
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    Very short but I enjoyed it, thanks for writing!

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  • rhondasail
    November 6

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    I wasn't sure if the beautiful world you are 'seeing' here is the one outside your mothers womb, or that you are seeking that inner world again. I think I get this idea from the lines, "I was born, Oh God!!!" and "I wondered all around this world"(perhaps you meant 'I WANDERED all around this world')...It may be just me, but it seems fearful or overwhelmed, rather than joyful. Still, in all, its expressive and I kinda like it. Peace always, Rhonda


  • lake of dremas
    November 6

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    nice , but you think our world is beautiful? a very lovely peace , hey Ahkam please read my work : if i must go
    take care
    missed you and your works , keep sharing