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Emptiness...

Words just cant
Seem to express
This feeling of
My emptiness..
No self worth
No living with pride
Just a vacantness
Thats deep inside

Want to banish it
Just for a while
Bask in the sunshine
Of a heart that smiles
But just cant find
The power within
To expel this darkness
That I am in

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  • isomuse silver member
    November 11

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    Wow! This is very nice. Darkness...emptiness...such familiar things! But why do we tend to treasure them and hold them close? The dimeter rhythm with such "empty" white space all around gives it a nice visual effect as well.


  • Bluemonday silver member
    November 7
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    thats a very sad but well written poem...thank you..Dan


  • paul claxton
    November 7
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    its like u know what im thinking

  • dreamofolwin
    November 6
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    Thanks so much for your comment It meant a lot, Lol.

  • atomic-angel
    November 6

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    precise

    Precise in the image of Emptiness!! Exactly how many peeps feel, especially me. Could definitely relate to the emotion, and luvin the part of....just cant find the power within-to expel this darkness that I am in!! Yeah, that speaks volumes, great write, look forward to readin more. You definitely captured the image of Darkness and Emptiness.

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