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Haiku#6

chime of water falls
on dry dust blurrs the vision--
smell of earth rises

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5-7-5 haiku

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  • Malabu
    November 6

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    somehow chime* would give me an image of bells ringing...
    im sure you can find an alternate discriptive image to head off this ku.... tempo comes to my mind?
    only a suggestion
    not sure about the on* dry dust blurrs vision

    vision blurrs on dry dust?
    is my suggestion
    love the last line much


  • TheQueenOfPoetry
    November 6

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    Very poetic and profound. I really love the last line of smelling the earth.


  • Purush
    November 6

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    "chime of water falls
    on dry dust blurrs the vision--
    smell of earth rises"
    oh! great
    The spreading of the scented smell of the soil ,pervades all through the environment, actually before the rain drops in
    All the best in my contest