Yeah yeah and so much hiya!
hell!what an endearing way to concur ya
.....only someone as dear as you
could achieve that-again hell ya
I have a feel
that....we are galloping along famously
grinning and blushing
our personalities shine through gushing
and both so much in and deep.......
disarming and so endearing
we gel in a boiling lava searing
melting time....and hopes
from heart veins to earlobes
I wonder
on passion's yonder
will it be just dew drops
or extra brewed 'bee worked' honey
that depth churns
some whispers waft
more intelligent than daft
murmur you and me
be careful what you ask for
...you just might get it...thus far
the concept is philosophic
and deep the logic
an esoteric!...a delicious word...
those were my thoughts almost exactly
my lady and my lord!
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those were my thoughts almost exactly
my lady and my lord
Please tell me what you think
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Fun read, love your style
Refreshing style, upbeat and keeps the readers interest. Content and imagery
excellent. I enjoyed reading you.
Cheryl
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Good flow and cool poetic...This wants to be read several times more. It's like the solver=tongued devil...scoping is prey...
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i keep coming back to read this....i adore it
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Those mo ments don't seem to last long enough. Good love-feeling comparisons. ALl delicious words.
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What a fun pen this is, almost an upbeat Rap song!
I especially loved the section:
we gel in a boiling lava searing
melting time....and hopes
from heart veins to earlobes"
Great flow from start to finish as if it was just dripping down the page, wonderfully done
Many blessings, Sandi
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Nice one!
I like the lines
'be careful what you ask for
...you just might get it'
My favourite band Daughtry says that in one of his songs 'Home'
'Be careful what you wish for, cos you just might get it all'
Great job
Love
Sonya
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this piece is fun, well written. it up lifted my mood.
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I like the feel of this piece. Made me feel like a youngster. Excellent work
Sharon
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absolutly beautiful. flows wonderfully! keep it going!
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this poem made me feel like i was skipping through the fields and inhaling the flowers.
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Another lovely piece
a pleasure to read. Thanks for
sharing and do, keep them flowing.
Passionspromise
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this put a smile on my face...i love the randomness of it, because it all fits together so well...conceptually outstanding...i dig what may be between the lines here...an alluring write of verbage and thought...an opening, to gaze into...hypnotic giggles...outstanding
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