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Haiku (autumn)

Autumn rain pours down
robin shivers on a branch

forecast warned of snow.

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  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    November 15
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    a vivid visual,
    shivering red-breast
    readying for winter!

    Well cone!!

    M-C

  • Topnotchsy
    November 14
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    A chill ran through the air while reading this poem. Nice write and best of luck in the contest with this.


  • joliemere
    November 8
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    love this haiku. 2nd line is very vivid visual image. Can see it in my minds eye as if I were standing on my porch looking out at my own yard. I only wish my forecast called for snow. Hasn't snowed here in a long, long time. Great write Di.


  • capricornpoet
    November 7
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    poor little robin

    Excellent Haiku, evokes sounds and sights of autumn..lovely


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    November 7

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    these are so deceivingly simple and there is the reason I read these and not attempt to write them you really understand just how good people are with form poetry like this when you attempt to get the same easy feel and flow as you have achieved here. To say so much with so little is an art form More women should aspire to Just kidding I'm in for it now! lol well done masterB


  • Malabu
    November 6

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    I imagine the rain before the snow
    might of a brisk cold wind on a late autumn day

    how are you girl? Hope all is well with you poet


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 6

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    This is a lovely bit of brevity, Sweetie. Indeed, we will soon be in the greedy grasp of winter once more. I, for one, do not look forward to it. Good luck in the contest, my Friend.




  • Purush
    November 6

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    all the best in my contest

    Autumn rain pours down
    robin shivers on a branch
    forecast warned of snow.

    so chilling and thrilling too
    lovely
    all the best in my contest

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