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Lord God, My Father

Lord God, my father, I love you
I know I am not worthy
I know I am not clean
Father here is my hand
Would You hold it?

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  • Perennial Plague
    November 6

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    Nice write! I think this is what I'd also tell God if I'm face-to-face with him.

    Father here is my hand
    Would You hold it?

    Those last two simple lines have such a great impact on me.


    Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest. XD


    - Dray