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survive through winter

autumn
sunshine fading
the sun never loved enough
leafless, grasping deep for springs
live again

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  • Peteskid gold member
    November 29
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    This is quite good, seems to have bold imagery and ideas but also brings a certain meed to tht reader, something about time and passage, thoughtfully done...PK


  • azure85 gold member
    November 7

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    Very good cinquain about the aspect of autumn you wish would pass, and the seasons would bring spring around again soon. Thank you so much for your cinquain.


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 7

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    This is a pensive piece, a stream of conscious wondering which autumn seems to bring along with it. Fall has always been my favorite season, and I do not look forward to its inevitable ending and winter's arrival thereafter. Lovely work, indeed. Good luck in the contest, Poet.


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    November 6

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    Oh wow, this is short, sweet, and to the point and I really enjoyed reading this. You really did an excellent job on this, I got a sense of longing for the sun and for warmth while reading it. Keep smiling, and good luck in all you do.