My soul stretches into eternity
on the spark of life,
but rides forever
on the edge of darkness.
It is the color of wind
crossing the mountains
as it picks up before the storm,
and makes the sound of sunrise
burning its way into the day.
A contest entry
- Show Me Your Soul by Toma Wolf27.
700 points, ended November 9, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
nothing specific do I ask
Comments
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Beautifully written... I can relate in being hopeful in spite of often in a dark place.
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Thanks Mary
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P.S.
I've heard it said that a soul weighs about a 3/4 of an ounce; the body having been weighed before, and then after death... and it is recorded to be about 1/1000 of a person's body weight. Or 21 grams. Well, this is the theory, anyway.
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Beautifully inspiring artistry...
Buddy, what can I say that hasn't already been said by the others before me?!!? 
I love it!! Keep your quill flowing, Poet!! 
Peace Always,
Cyn
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thank you Cyn. This was a muses inspiration. The contest just sparked it with the color of your soul querry, I but answered.
Thank you again,
Buddy -
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You are the humble poet, to be sure...
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by the way "it's" should be "its", I think
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Looks familiar
This is wonderful. Absolutely stunning imagery... takes my breath away. Also makes me think a lot about life and death and all the moments in between, then what comes after we die. Do our souls stretch into eternity? Are our lives just a day in the vast expanse of eternity?
Beautiful and provocative.
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I think our souls are eternal. NOw, we may not remember past bodies we inhabited. There are vestiges that pop up as dejavu sometimes, and we learn... or not.
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i love the color of wind, makes me think of how as it moves things, it shades things differently, changes the color of things..and the sound of sunrise is beautiful.. this is quite lovely & creative.
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From your comment I actually accomplished my goal. To color my soul without actually putting a color to it.
Thank you, your commented helped me there.
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Very softly done here my friend C
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I think you captured your "soul" very poetically here, Buddy.
The second stanza is stunningly beautiful.
Love, L
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Thank you my Lady, I tried to color it with out color. Even I kinda like the way it turned out.
Thanks again
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very nice. short and tells gives plenty to visualize. this is beautiful. thank you for sharing it and i wish you the best in my contest.
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I appreciate the contest, to begin with, it served as a good inspiration..
Thank you,
Buddy
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get rid of the ing in burning, darling. sounds better out loud.
this piece is quiet and intelligent and thought provoking.
I loved it,
Love,
jin
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Why does everybody dislike -ing? Yes, in come cases I agree, but I like them here. Not sure why, but I prefer the flow.
Thanks as always though.
Love,
Buddy
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