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Walking On

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Most days,
I tread softly on the porcelain shards
of shattered expectations,

cringing at the crunch
of shell against concrete.

The yolk has long since dried
into an unsightly stain,
yellow against gray;

tepid, no longer lucid -

no meringue to savor
against the sorrow.

Only pallid parchment
will save me from the bitterness
that comes from infinite yearning;

I pour my passion
from an unending well of deep, dark ink,

smearing the pages with an occasional tear
that betrays what I believe in,

what I would willingly barter
for a single act of silence that soothes.

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Author notes


 
 
"Whenever we try to be something we are not, we usually wind up being something we shouldn't be."
 
 
This was inspired by the notion of trying to be everything to everyone - and losing ourselves in the process. You can never please everyone - in fact, you can rarely please anyone, in reality. Shakespeare said "To thine own self be true." I think he was onto something rather profound.
 
 
 
Art: "Butterfly Egg" by David Rickerd
 
 
 

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  • ecrivain01
    November 19
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    This is the poem ...

    I wanted you to enter in the Prompt Redux contest.


  • manatee
    November 12
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    This is a lovely poem, as if from "butterfly eggs". -The Manatee

  • ecrivain01
    November 11
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    Good job here ...

    and rather well executed write, all in all.

    Thanks for entering.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    November 9

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    Oh, my, talk about gorgeous! This is just wonderful, with vivid images in each stanza; I could feel the crunch beneath my feet. Such sorrow and regret, such longing: beautifully written, dear Poet! Lita


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 7

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    i know where this piece comes from and i'm glad you've moved past it into a future to be filled with smiles, not tears. still, it is a lovely poem written with honor and bravery.

    good luck in the contest.



  • Nicolette gold member
    November 7

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    i understand this one so very well, my friend. thank you for voicing what i so often can't and for doing it so very beautifully. this one touched me. gorgeous writing, as always

    ~ Nicolette


  • whitecoffee
    November 7

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    ahhhh, wonderful! My most favorite stanza is the fourth one. I love every part of this that wows with each word read. Absolutely grogeous.


  • condor gold member
    November 6

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    A very deep piece indeed and again your authors notes allowed the reader to ubderstand just how passionate in its story was. I agree that it is very hard to please all but neither should we try to please all. We should take our own souls into account. I really like the first couple of lines which really drew me into the read and caused me to smile somewhat. I also loved the two last line which to me spoke of a heart which needed rest and stillness to calm the soul. Thanks again for sharing.

  • Bob Fox
    November 6

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    Poet

    No need to barter. For the sdun shines out through your words. In life and liberty there must be time for dreams and the words of an honest poet. Hence all the gold. Well penned indeed.


  • penman gold member
    November 6

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    Excellent

    Such a beautifully crafted write. The words flow so eloquently like that are dancing through the mind. The very best in the contest

  • Lord Gegishov
    November 6

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    What beauty! What beauty! What sweetness! What beauty! One would have to have traveled many miles through many lifetimes to acquire a a fineness of expression, of experience such as this. I felt this poem held nearly every feeling I have ever felt in it. Scenes from my adolescence, as I walked the house alone in Autumn, a little cold, but enthralled by the silence, or went outside and watched the sky in its hoary magnificence--few birds fly above on days like those, but there are some still, precious and graceful, black as shadows. This is a poem of the highest order. It is not mere words upon a page, but a captured experience. You should be ranked amongst the greats, for this and for all your exquisite works.

  • Wow, this is heartbreaking ... but so achingly beautiful in its humanity. I think I might cry ...


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    November 6

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    I can empathise wholly with all you have expressed in this piece, Wanda, and it is beautifully written. You have taken the old adage "walking on egg shells" and spoken it anew with the images you worked with. It is the cool edge of the parchment which mirrors our own crisp edge of human boundaries and limits of tolerance. To compared old dreams to the long dried stain of egg yolks on grey floors, that was striking and edgy to say the least, and throughout this there is proof of your pen's continual ability to awe me.


  • michael thomas
    November 6

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    I do not think you can do better than this poem. This poem is where your deftness with choosing pictures and your ability to combine words - they both come together here. Not only are your words cohesive but they are honest and you reveal to us a soul who knows the pain of being inadequate to perfection. So many people are not, as this poem show of you, so many people are ego bound and cannot accept their humanity. When you write from the heart, like this, you are unmatchable.


  • mgmc gold member
    November 6

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    This poem is very skillfully written and bursting with feelings-almost melancholy. It is touching and a great piece of work.

    You are one of the most giving people I've encountered here on A/P and instinct says in general. The desire to give to others is palpable and highly admirable but it is possible to give too much. I hope your boundaries don't allow that line to be crossed. For my part, I'm extremely grateful for your encouragement.

    By the way, having one of my poems on your list of beautiful words is a very great honor!
    Thank you.

    Please take good care. Your words and actions inspire and are very appreciated!

    Marlene


  • ccawley gold member
    November 6

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    Oh my Wanda, this is aching and sore. "tears that betray what I believe in"...
    There is strength in tears, I believe. I know you give all of yourself to everyone even though I've never met you in person. I don't have to because your compassionate heart, appreciation for art, people, God's creation is on every page that you touch.
    I love it.


  • Oh wow! This leaves me almost speechless. You did an amazing job with this and I really enjoyed reading it, and the picture it painted in my head. Great write and good luck in all you do.

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