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Cold Descent


Stretched beyond my limits,
tightness grips my chest,
thoughts in utter chaos,
embittered and distressed.

Zest for life is leaking,
world so dark and cold.
Years of vicious cruelty,
makes me feel so old.

Suffering in silence,
world only sees me smile.
Spirit takes a beating,
life just seems futile.


No one here to help me,
or dry the tears I cry.
Disappointment whispers,
'you're nothing' that is why.

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16. Coldness descends upon my tattered soul

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  • Puppydog gold member
    November 6

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    SO VERY SAD

    I hate to see another feel this way though so many times this has been my feelings. To feel this is the lowest one can feel, it hurts so much.


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    November 6

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    This one freezes every spot on me...It's sooooooo hard people can say things like that, parents can say things like that to their children..

    But you're a beautiful women and you know it!!!!!!!!!!


    btw.What's that wit Great Britain on your profile..


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    November 6

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    You echo the thoughts and feelings of so many here on Allpoetry with this poem. No matter how much we protest or insist, the fact is that virtual people, even those who care, are no fully "with us" - the internet is our blessing and our curse.

    s3, L4, I think you meant "futile", though the stress and verb "sound" differs from line 2.
    You could also use "life doesn't seem worthwhile".

    Joyce


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    November 6

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    You made me
    you wrote this about me..correct??..i can relate to every word so very much..i'm having 2 or 3 major panic attacks everyday now..being alone is horrific at times..ya know i have given up on several occations so i know that feelingas well
    Very poignant and dark piece
    Brilliantly penned..wish you the best my mentor David


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 5

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    oh damn;

    my heart bled with each line as each line slashed another ribbon off me -
    darkly penned

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