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dogs never bite, just humans

Missing image

 As Monroe Quit

 

 

 

 

Caught between red light districts and virginity


China doll rests on satin pillow


where


hollywood will pay a thousand dollars for a kiss and fifty cents for a soul.

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Image by:; xMissTake

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A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Naridill
    November 13

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    I like the idea and the way you portrayed it. I felt the space after where is extremely too unnecessary. It leaves too much breath for the next line and you have to go back and read it for it to make sense.


  • Ken-Maverick
    November 7

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    "hollywood will pay a thousand dollars for a kiss and fifty cents for a soul."
    Daaaaaamn, that's one awesome line Becca!!!
    ...again, this is brevity at its finest.
    All the best to ya in the contest.

    Ken


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 6

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    perfect...this is spot on with the picture...I love the last line...wow!


  • Eusebius
    November 6

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    Short yet pithy, poignant and most probably entirely too true! A very effective short write! loved it, loved it!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 6

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    This is just slap my face wonderful. One of the best short form poems i have read. You rock!!

    Joe


    • Girl-Interrupted gold member
      November 6
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      oh you make me blush, joe.... ! thanks for the read, i always love hearing from you!


  • JinSays gold member
    November 6

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    actually I think the California Redemption Value has gone up for souls, all the way to 75 cents. I really loved the China Doll reference here, really brings it to another dimension-nice.
    love,
    jin


  • Max Alexandersson
    November 6

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    HOW GOOD IS THIS?... I'm gonna tell you.

    SOOOOO fucking good.


  • Fug-azi
    November 6
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    Stunning


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 6

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    D@YMNNN!

    This is power in brevity!!!..Brilliant penning dear..Bravo!!!
    David

  • JToddUnderhill
    November 6

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    Holy....

    ...... crap that is powerful, I could write about the horrid machine that Hollywood is but you already know that, I will just say good job and good luck with the contest


  • Nom de Plume
    November 5

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    youve put a lot into this, I am not a big fan of celebrity, so this resonates with me...the end line wraps it up wonderfully.. love it!!


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 5

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    DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYUMMMN!!!

    Powerful! BREVITY, at it's absolute best! a top fav. babe!

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