sometimes
, in life,
we must (close ourselves in)
and ) shut others out ( ...
What did you think? Would you change anything?
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Lovely, an emotive concept stated clearly and purely
Making it powerful Also like how you used the opposite words in and out to make that similar point, was effective added weight to it ..
Really nice poem =) xx
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True.
I do that on a daily basis.
: )
-Cassie
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simple but real. length doesnt dictate the quality of a poem.. and this is quality. thanks for sharing
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Damn, you were quite right. So little but it says so much. How do we know who and when to shut them out? I do love the way it is also illustrated! Definately a winner if you were to enter a contest! Keep up the writes!
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This definatly is contempory . The parenthes are cool they make your point
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Cleverly constructed ... admirably makes your point.
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Indeed. The parenthesis really gave the feeling that you are closing the doors to others, nice read thanks.
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this is cool, nicely written. simple and i like the format alot.
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