I lay in darkness for so long
that I saw colors where there were none
so long that the shadows whispered lies to me
I thought I had been asigned to hell
removed from humanity
my mouth sealed against all words
but the words I could not find
were not needed
Umm... and I can't think of anything else lol.
Author notes
I already posted this on SW because I couldnt get on here, but I want to know what you guys think.
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i like the descriptiveness and darkness of it. this place is sadly famaliar.
great job
you've made the feeling come alive in the most perfect way
kass
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i love it...i really think it's awesome...i like the rhyming and the feel of the words as they're passing your tongue...very nice piece..keep it up.
and just like the last guy that line about the shadows whispering lies to you was classic...
Peace...
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haha yeah so far thats everyones favorite part lol
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Shawn, how dare you?
this doesn't suck. bloody hell, it's awesome!!
Best thing i've read this month despite its length!
Such an amazingly dark write.
"...the shadows whispered lies to me" --> love that line.
This poem is brilliance personified! i really love it!
Keep it up! Hoping to see more from you soon.
Really well done, hun
-Vampy
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"so long that the shadows whispered lies to me"
that was very very great!
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thanks a lot :]
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