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falling

yellow eyes, crimson tides
what is left to remember?
if you catch the goose will you let it loose
will this be our september?
we fraternize and materialize
it's based on all contenders
if you fallow the loops and jump threw the hoops
you might fall into december

what did you first think, how did it make you feel, whats with the name?

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  • Sector-Hunter silver member
    November 5

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    Hmmm I am not sure what to make of this. I loved it though it flowed really well. The feeling of this poem makes you think. I have not seen your work or you in some time missed you SH


    • dark desire
      November 6
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      it has alot to do with society and the pattered lives everyone lives. They have created a image... and idealism of what is suppose to be and most give no thought to changing that state mind set... falling in to there own December... a December that they and society have created... thanks for reading it SH, I am glad that you liked it.