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restless feet

like any other day

this has a constant,

the blue with tinges of mist

to remind me of Ireland; of home

 

concrete trees,

those people obscured

forgetting how to focus

missing the pleasantry of things

 

it's warmer now,

a tenth of winter

long put aside

with jackets and nipping winds

 

skin reacts

with potent perfumes,

spring rose and thorny vines

hints of calamari from the docks

 

hitting my drowsy morning

i know where i am

 

what everyone calls their safe place,

no intrusional surprises,

candor in acquaintances

and elliptical masks of certain friends

 

i am the consonant following their vowels,

speaking a voice i'd hidden,

away from circumstantial monotony

over oceans to settle into a new space

 

they think i've returned,

this body statically robotic

waiting for normalcy

 

what is that really?

 

the motions of a body

a step in time with others

a dignified existence

 

when all restlessness in these feet say

take me back to the strangeness

 

i am over playing in recollections,

reflections that appear so unlike myself

i want to cry at the loss of it

 

but can't

 

it's who i am meant to be

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • ecrivain01
    November 11

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    I like this ...

    although I am not sure if it's exactly what the prompt called for. However, it's a higher caliber of writing than most I've been seeing.

    Thanks for entering.


    • Cannonsfire
      November 11

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      I guess i saw it as a rebuttal lol I took it to be offended that I am who I am and have no need to be what I shouldn't be...


  • michael thomas gold member
    November 6

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    this is worthy of highest critique. you are being honest and so creative in your extended word choices. in addition to the fact that you know how to display the words in a poem that has form and stays with the mind.

    • Cannonsfire
      November 6
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      Thank you Michael, you are very kind and I appreciate it very much C