She's lovely yet horrible
The lady of my heart
I think that I shall leave her
Though I know I'll never start
I fear her though I love her
The lady of my life
She is the lady which I love
I must withstand her strife
Author notes
10. She's so glamorous, yet insidious .
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this is more like it! , one word still sticks slightly in the second stanza line three "which" i thought whom fitted better, bearing in mind this is only a suggestion as i know the feeling when someone else starts meddling in my own work and one should usually stick with the words that come in writing. well done young sir!!
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oh it was all going so well until "tart" that threw me but otherwise good write!! emotional involvement with the fairer sex can often be scarey and ecstatic at the same time you express that well here! write on young scholar!!
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