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From a Distance, The Roar of the Orchid is Loud

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          From a distance,

the roar of the orchid is loud.

I churn in my sleep, drums echoing in my heart.

I roll in lush, green meadows,

laughing in the arms of my lover;

 

A scream awakens me -

it is my own voice, crying out in the night -

tears streak down my face as the moon hovers over the desert.


           I ache with the utter lack of your voice,

though its echo remains rhythmic in my bones -

sorrow wrings my heart without easing a breath;

I cannot speak - I can only sigh.

 

Everyone tells me you're gone, never to return;

I know the truth of it too well -

yet, your reflection, sacred to my soul,

still slow dances in my eyes.

 

Perhaps these throes of agony I feel

are from the finality of letting you go.

Perhaps music will sing in my veins once more -

until then, I mourn your symphony

of beauty and grace.


          We wail upon our arrival,

imminently fearful of what lies before us,

unknowing in our innocence, torn from our roots 

and set adrift on a fathomless tide of discovery, seeking perfection.

 

We follow a trail of mysterious breadcrumbs,

puzzled by their appearance - 

we leave the path and stumble upon the shoals.

 

We flutter our wingless dreams,

praying for wind and hoping for flight

before oblivion claims our destiny.

 

We walk before we crawl and snarl before we weep,

expecting infinity to hold still in its progression

beyond the jagged edges of the grave.




 
 
 
 
 
 

Author notes



 
Graphic artist unknown 
 
 
prompt:

"Whenever we try to be something we are not, we usually wind up being something
we shouldn't be."
 
 
In this instance, I relied on the memories of being a "near-widow"; we were never married, although we had lived together for 14 years. His remaining family made sure I knew it was never an "official" status and caused me to suffer even more grief than I already sustained by his loss. I ended up being alone for far too many years, submerged in sorrow for what might have been, for what should have come to pass. It took a lot of strength and determination to ascend from the utter depths of despair. When I finally arose again, I realized how much time I had wasted on something I had refused to accept for so long - becoming, in essence, something I was not and never should have been, to begin with. 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • ecrivain01 gold member
    November 11
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    Excellent poem ...

    I'm not sure if it quite fits the prompt, but good job nonetheless.

    Thanks for entering.


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 7

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    i love the formatting you've done with this remarkable poem and everything you've poured from your heart onto the page.

    good luck in the contest.



  • condor gold member
    November 6

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    This is a most beautfiul write and being something based on your own personal experience, it really was something to think about. Your authors notes really added much to the wonderful write of lonliness and torment you suffered for so so long. You gave us a glimpse of the despair and the wounding of your heart by others. Incredibly rich in emotion and feelings of desire. I really thought this was super and was so very touching indeed. Thak you so much for sharing such a vivid wonderful piece.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    November 6

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    Potent poem and story, with puissant images and surprising metaphors.


  • masterblaster gold member
    November 6
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    Hi, a very lovely poem, a pleasure to read, Di

  • We flutter our wingless dreams,
    praying for wind and hoping for flight
    before oblivion claims our destiny.



    We walk before we crawl and snarl before we weep,
    expecting infinity to hold still in its progression
    beyond the jagged edges of the grave.


    I really loved these two stanzas, but as always you amaze me with the strength in your words.. Great write hun!


  • michael thomas gold member
    November 5

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    You cram so much into your poems that they become object lessons in truths. You are a firecracker poetess. That is, your words explode with many meanings. We sit in our lawn chairs and enjoy the sky show of your poems.


  • ccawley gold member
    November 5

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    Oh I know this story very well. I wasted a lot of time too. I'm sorry...people can be unkind.
    This is a wonderful..."flutter our wingless dreams"!
    Very moving

  • Theasp
    November 5
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    don't need to say anything,

    you have made me feel all.
    Ann


  • eastwind32
    November 5

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    Such wonderful imagery and great choice of words. A poem to the Nth degree!


  • penman gold member
    November 5

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    Excellent

    Such an amazing write and terrific images, totally tugs at the heart. So well crafted. Best of luck in the contest


  • poet2angels gold member
    November 5

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    Oh my!

    All of this is so amazing but even after reaching the ending, I still go back to the beautiful and emotional beginning:

    " From a distance,

    the roar of the orchid is loud.
    I churn in my sleep, drums echoing in my heart.
    I roll in lush, green meadows,
    laughing in the arms of my lover;"

    So lovely an image is this dream even knowing the sadness within the real story behind it...

    Thank you for sharing a piece of your heart

    Lynda


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