Somehow from an endless dream
I woke to scribe such words for you
as I lay among the tall sweet grass
that crowns this merry glade wherein
I slept and bathed in summers warmth
that did caress my fragile mood
so flimsy were my tangled thoughts
they slipped away upon a breeze
that scurried by without a care
and took away what I had there
for just one moment.
TC Nov 09
A contest entry
- unwritten by JinSays.
1006 points, ended November 18, 22 entries
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ohyes, this is lovely. it moves quickly, doesnt give the reader a chance to grow impatient. the ending is charming and all too familiar. thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, and I wish you all the best.
love,
jin -
Like your style of no punctuation here...It made the flow terrific. Nostagia is on every line...Moments in time that you will never forget, friend...This is one of your best writes...Bookmarking and all the best in the contest!
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Many thanks
I am so grateful for your comments and praise, thank you.
TC
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The flow of these words is excellent. I wanted to read them again and again. I feel the forlorn feeling that you've written of here poet. Almost as if you never wanted to let go of that "moment". A wonderful work of poetry is scribed here. I wish you well in the contest.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Thank you
Many thanks for reading this and for taking the time to comment but now that it's done I want to change it. Do you ever do that.
TC
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You have painted a beautiful image with such soft words and thoughts ... a joy to read.
All the best in the contest.
Sue
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Thanks
Thanks you Sue you are generous to me.
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A beautiful
poem, written with whistful, dreamy tones. I really enjoyed reading it. Lovely words.
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Thank you
Thank you for your comments but now that it's done I want to change it. Do you ever feel like that. -
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I do feel like that at times, if the poem just doesnt feel right. With your poem, it reads so well and with perfect rhythm, that it does not need tweeking. It is lovely as it is.
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