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hush, hush, hush.

Biting away your strawberry lips,
Tearing at the flesh of lies,
Cut your tongue with dagger scissors,
Flooded lungs and blinded eyes.

Breathe a slow, slow breath in,
And with fear do not release,
Water-fill your tortured throat,
And leave it in the cold to freeze.

Lift your ballerina toes,
Place them on the shards of glass,
Razor blades and jewelry,
Memories of distant past.

Fog-filled lips, tobacco flake,
Broken promises and hearts,
Curses and a stain of lies,
Pinning you with silver darts.

Snow-white skin and broken bones,
Toxic shadows in disguise,
Works of art upon your skin,
Let it go before it dies.

Hush, hush, hush.

Fall from the sky and to the ground,
Bruises covering your flesh,
Powder star dust everywhere,
Harsh wind hits your face; refresh.

Raindrop eyes and bright red veins,
Swollen minds and butterflies,
Months of secrets, lies, and pity,
You'll never hear it's silent cries.

Heartstrings unravel; moths on scarves,
Free it's soul beneath the night,
Stars on fire, dancing, burning,
Farewell, forever; last goodnight.

Leave me with your stardust, wonder,
Kiss my lips, release your thunder,
Remember me this way; asunder,
And cut my heart with dagger words.

hush, hush, hush.

Author notes

This is basically me venting with a combonation of the amazing title prompt. When I read the contest title, I absolutely had to join because it automatically made me feel.
I hope you feel as well.

<3

r o m e o . m u s t . d i e .

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  • veryfunkygirl
    December 3
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    Okay... getting creeped out.

    The first thing I have to ask is what prompt is it for? I know I said in the rules to put the prompt numbers in your comments. I think I didn't make it clear that it should be used for prewrites too, but since you posted this before I said that, I will let it slide.

    This poem is very deep and thoughtful. You're almost scaring me.

    Thanks for entering and good luck


  • vampireblood
    November 30
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    Wow, this was a really great poem, I loved the rhythm of it. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.

    ~Vampy


  • MJ Forgives
    November 25
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    Really great poem. It caught my attention. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
    -Jess


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    November 22
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    "Razor blades and jewerley," JeWER:LEY should be JEWELRY

    "Fog-filled lips, tobaco flake," TABACO should be TOBACCO


    This gives a lot of things to think about. Those are the only two mistakes that I noticed in the whole piece. You did a good job with the writting of it. Thank you for sharing and thank you for entering


  • Jaymy
    November 17

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    wow!! i love this... sometimes venting is the best way to deal. beautiful!!!

    • Lady Juliet
      November 17
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      Wow thanks I'm glad you liked it! And thank you for the gold!!

      xx leah


  • xxvampyregirlxx
    November 8

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    intresting. its really dark thats what i love about it. thanks for the entry and goodluck in the contest


  • PaigeePerfectionx
    November 6

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    Wow. Thank you so much for entering this! Its brilliant, by far my winner! It's quite a personal write i feel, but it made me think. Well done on a briliant write! x


    • Lady Juliet
      November 6
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      Wow..I'm shocked. Thank you so much! I just wrote what I felt..and apparently my feelings were good enough. Thank you!

      xx

      romeo must die.

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