Humongous pods of heffalunk whales
Gastronomical gourmands gulp crustaceans in swales:
Vast oceans of krill
With smidgens of dill
Go down complete with ships and sails.
Author notes
As for the use of swales: do krill browse in underwater seaweed meadows? Probably not, but if the algae are the meadow lands of the ocean and the frill dine on protozoans of them or other eentsy beentzy things, well, you'll get what I was trying to achieve.
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Great! Line two is a bit long in beats, but I suppose that gets the point across.
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It's rather gallooomphing. The one good part of it I think is the last line. Maybe a bit more tinkering?
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oh, I think this a most fine children's poem....
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I was hoping you'd get a kick out of that last line! Thank you dearly for the read!
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