How can you call and tell me you feel lost?
it was your choice and choices come with cost
I tried to tell you then, you'd reach a moment when
you'd want what you and I had once again
It wasn't just the evenings which we shared
the times I held you close when you dispaired
or all the days we knew, that time could not undo
your killed much more when you said we were through
It's pain so great to hear your eager voice
but parting never would have been my choice
and now my heart is hard, it was shattered with discard
our song's been sung, best find another bard
Author notes
Choice
A contest entry
- One Word Prompt #17 by Diminished Capacity.
1075 points, ended November 17, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is such a sad piece, I hope you find enough strength to get past this. You did a wonderful job with this piece, thank you so much for entering my contest.
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Well versed tale of heartbreak here and so true, somethings can't be mended. Good luck in your contest.
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Mistakes in life sometimes more than we dare say. but in the end hope that will heal and maybe friends in the place of hate.. for life sometimes is hard to take...heartfelt piece thank you for sharing hugs always Angel♥
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A wonderful write.... bitter sweet.
I esp like the line... " or all the days we knew, that time could not undo"
Well done.
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This os a wonderful and pointed quatrain penned with emotion and wisdom. I think you took the prompt and did very well with it.
Love,
Amera♥
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An excellent poem on the prompt and the consequences in this case have been quite hefty.
Choices are made, people hurt, but also mistakes are made that we don't understand until we have caused the pain. There is also another choice here of second chances.
You have certainly evoked some strong responses to this poem. Best wishes with this
gaylene
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sad poem but great job on it best of luck in the contest
Sean
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always...
I know but it is soooo true
excellent rhyme
we make choices
and there are always attachments
great look at consequences
very very well done
God bless you my friend...
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well, you certainly made yourself clear, and in rhyme no less! Choices are made and regardless if they are good or bad, you have to deal with the consequences. Very well done here. Thank you for visiting my poetry, because it brought me to yours
Lane
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Great interpretation and skill shows in your structure, etc. Nothing forced with meter; fits together very nicely--amazingly so! Great read. Thanks!
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