So slow to interrupt me
as I cry upon his shoulder.
Absorbs my tears like a sponge
and repeats my coils of laughter
when happiness is my mood.
Like a true and trusted friend
he never judges me,
but with honesty will tell me
when he thinks I'm wrong.
So many years have passed
since I didn't know him.
I am thankful every day
to have this special best friend.
He's a breeze of air
when I'm feeling smothered,
a handkerchief when I cry.
He is a laughing box
when I'm happy.
He will wink if he's telling me lies.
Not many are allowed this kind of friend
I hate that I can't share him with all of you.
The only thing I can do is wish for you
the same as I have been blessed with
for my days on this Earth.
A contest entry
- BWOW~~Make-up~~#23~~with aboomer, Starz of Heaven and islekine by islekine.
700 points, ended November 6, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Lovely to have a friend like that - a true blessing in this life.
I really don't have any constructive critique on this - it's such a personal write, the depth and emotions are heart-felt.....and that is hard to 'tinker with' for improving a write I think. In tinkering, you most times lose the heart-felt emotion.....just my opinion.
I enjoyed this. Nicely done
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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Such lovely sentiments!
We should all have a friend like this...I fortunately do, I wish everyone did...thanks for sharing your talent!
Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on....
and
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He's a breeze of air
when I'm feeling smothered,
a handkerchief when I cry.
He is a laughing box
when I'm happy.
He will wink if he's telling me lies.
I really enjoyed reading this write. You did an amazing job on it. The stanza ^above^ was my favorite, but this was really good as a whole. Keep up the great writing!!
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A beautiful poem with heavy feeling entwined with the words.
Very well written, dear poet.
Thank you for sharing, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Zach Estel.
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