Cerebral connections misfire in your sight,
words find their way out backwords and unheard.
My knees weaken as your fragile fingers touch me.
I smile as I feel the warmth you exude through to me.
I try one more time to say what I feel but by this time
you moved on.
I tell you in my mind each and every day,
that my love for you has never been stronger
and as much as the first time I told it to you.
Not that it was heard but I said it.
Taking hold of you looking into your eyes,
I see my future.
The words come easy as if I wrote them on paper,
I love you and always will you hear me say for the first time.
A contest entry
- Butterflies and Silence by Wynd Arc.
900 points, ended November 6, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please give me suggestions on what I could do to make this better. I will reward those to whomever asks and critiques with suggestions I can work with. And Thank you for reading.
Comments
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This is a really nice write....I very much like the easy reading ambiance..I especially like the line..you moved on....somehow it just stirred something in me...this is a very fine, cleverly sculpted write
thankyou
T
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awhh Matty this gave me butterflies!! what a lovely write <3 bravo~!
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This is a really good write and it shows much emotion through the words. I'm really glad you decided to enter my contest and good luck.
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Great job on the prompt. I love how you relayed your emotions and the reader could easily understand how you must feel for this person.
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