Poetry holds the key to my heart
If there is such a thing it’s been broken apart
Cold from the tip of my pen to my toes
Writing these rhymes, emotion explodes
Filling the paper with sorrow and rage
Venting my anger with words on the page
Without such a hobby I’m left feeling hollow
Doomed for a darker and harder tomorrow
Poetry gives me a feeling of hope
Sensations of purpose and methods to cope
Without it I’m lost, forgotten in time
So that’s why I publish my life in rhyme
Each sentence I scribble conveys how I’m feeling
Trapped in a world that’s broken and bleeding
Blinded by ignorance, envy and greed
Lavishly living, there’s others in need
Why can’t we all live united together
Spreading the weight ‘till it’s light as a feather
A planet in need of some desperate repairs
But when it comes down to it…
Nobody cares
A contest entry
- For The Group Seeking Perfect Rhyme and Rhythm by poets whisper.
1075 points, ended November 12, 7 entries
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Why can’t we all live united together
Spreading the weight ‘till it’s light as a feather
I thought these lines were very expressive. People often say that if money or land were evenly distributed we would all be better off. But the idle and feckless would soon be back to square one. I do agree we could do more to help carry each others burdens.
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Very well penned indeed. Excellent rhyme, rhythm and flow. Such a sad look at life and I know that I am often there and back. It's a great outlet for us all to be able to pen our emotions. Kind of eases the stress we live in.
Keep writing, your work is excellent
gaylene
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This is very well written. The expession of self through your poetic phrase . . .
you capture what we all are. very very nice!
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I think so many of us take solace through poetry, keeping us somewhat sane....you explain our common truth so well with your poem. I agree with your last verse except I do think some people care...there are some gooduns in this world, thankfully. A thoroughly good poem which I enjoyed reading immensly.
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I really like your use of toes and explodes. Nice rhythm and rhyme. Thank you for entering the contest as well.
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The thought comes to mind for me..."A problem shared is a problem halved," when I read some of your words here. You have been very prophetic here showing in your poem how most of us feel at some time or other. Putting out deepest thoughts and sometimes fears on paper can be theraputic sometimes, "sharing the problem!"....good luck in the comp...Dan
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i try and try to convince a friend that a problem shared is a problem halved but he is never convinced and prefers to suffer in silence. The cause of much mental stress and illness I believe. As for myself I need to vent on occasion.
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Love the rhyme I can never quite capture it but you do it so well in the words of Luke Skywalker teach me OB1 lol just kidding you did a really great job and I hope your proud of the result
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i love this amazing:]
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wow thats amazing..i love it =]
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I Love It
Why have I not read you before?
You have written a wonderful poem here with such a flow and rhythm it made me look for another verse as I didn't want it to end.
Welcome to our group and good luck in the contest.
Lulu
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