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unnoticed





unnoticed
amongst the fireworks
a shooting star








A contest entry

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  • Shantti silver member
    November 27
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    During fireworks shooting stars do seem to get lost sometimes. I've seen shooting stars during fireworks once with my daughter when she was little. I said "look, look" and pointed to it, but I was pointing to a sky full of fireworks and alot of people didn't see it.
    Great imagery, thank you for entering

  • hezakiah
    November 25
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    Interesting haiku. I like it very much while wondering as the perspective must come from the one who notices the shooting star while most do not? Otherwise, I think it is a paradox.