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Torn



As pages turn
and smoke gets harsh
I pave a road
of broken hearts
and bridges burn
scorching scars.
Within the soul
I feel
torn
apart.






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  • raw love
    November 6

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    a painful piece, i like the simplicity, it feels kind of like a knife wound, sharp and to the point. Which I think is quite fitting. nice work.


  • Veronica Leigh
    November 5

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    so much said in so little. If you added more it really has the potential to be an awesome song. let me know if you do decide to add more and maybe we can colab or something. Awesome job either way. I'm so jealous.


    • AmazinJason
      November 5
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      If you feel like writing something with this go for it.
      I don't see myself adding to it... but I'm down to collab, if you want to just let me know