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The Devil and the Monk

                       Prologue

 

That any man's intrinsically good

was a fallacy for the Devil.

To prove it so he chose a monk

to turn from Good to Evil -

a man of prayerful diligence,

a man with marked resilience

against Temptations snare.

While other's faults he would atone

in faultlessness he stood alone

in piety and prayer.

And he, each day, from Genesis

to Revelations read,

but the Devil's plan

was to gain the man

as he slept each night abed.

Now, not far from the chapel

 there lay a foul morass

and deep within its mire

 the Devil did amass

every theoretical

doubt that was heretical

that, whispered with insistence,

and, nightly, with persistence

could erode resistance

and turn a soul of pious bent

into a raving malcontent.

And, each night, as mist these rose

to drift across the chapel close

and seep inside and to the bed

to wreath around the sleeper's head.

For two full moons the man, it seems,

knew nights of deep disturbing dreams

that stayed to haunt him through the day

and taunt him when he knelt to pray -

a succubus, vampiric wraith,

that slowly drained him of his faith.

 

        Epilogue

 

As a reservoir of Evil breathes a myriad of sins

the undulating quagmire oozes forth its putrid mist.

Insidious as whispers in the psyche's oubliette,

opaque, it moves between stark pines and, over lair and sett,

to seep beneath the chapel door

and creep across the flagstoned floor

to where, by altar candlelight,

the monk, now Devil's acolyte,

around the blood-drawn pentagram

is circling widdershins.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

'Superman is man hero' (yuck!) Prompt 2
I've used all 20 of the prompt words - in the following order:
Intrinsically, fallacy, diligence, resilience, atone, revelation, morass, amass, resistance, raving, malcontent,reservoir, myriad, undulating, quagmire, putrid, insidious, oubliette, opaque, stark.
Note: "Widdershins" - said to be used in occult rites, circling in opposition to the apparent movement of the sun.

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  • Concrete Angel silver member
    November 12
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    Hehehe... that was a chuckle at your little side comment there to "superman is my hero" I've been getting a kick out of everyone throwing their in with it Now on to the poem

    You have used the word bank well. This piece is written so skillfully with perfect detail to rhyme and meter. I found myself reading this at a rather quick pace as the words developed and formed a rather catchy tune in my head. This reminds me of the poets of old weaving their tales of treachery and spiteful evil. On top of your wonderfully catchy rhyme and flow your images were fantastically vivid, just jumping off the page. I really enjoyed this read and found myself feeling sad for the monk in the end... though the final sight your words left me with was a dark disturbing visual. Love it!!!
    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 8

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    I've not seen you in this genre, but you tackle it with all the skill and panache you give to all else.

    Wonderful stuff

    Jeff