And so I swim these lapping tides
For centuries along this shore,
Between the headlands’ rocky sides
And so I swim these lapping tides
Where still the Tiger shark yet glides
Below the comber’s raspy roar,
And so I swim these lapping tides
For centuries along this shore.
Author notes
A triolet...
Please tell me what you think
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Hood-Wink!
Excellent use of repeated lines in this triolet...very creative and engaging, with smooth flow in meter and rhyme...you have a lovely way with words, the triolet is an interesting form to create with...you have impressed me with this piece...
You have been ambushed by a Bandit
All the very best with your poetry, it's been a pleasure to read...
~Lilac~
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Perfect form for this poem! By using a Triolet you have made the "lapping tides" simply roll! This is what a Triolet is for. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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I like this, it floats around the mind, as poetry should
Jeff
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Perhaps this is what happens from petting the Tiger shark? I told him this before he jumped off the ship, but he said they're so beautiful, and promptly pulled me off with him!
I love your choice of the word raspy, and Tiger sharks of course, and the choice of the word glides: that truly is what sharks do, if you remember seeing how they swim: to me it's enough to freeze me along the spine it's so smooth and terrifying. I cannot imagine being so much of a fool to go and feed them by hand. I love the phrase "headlands' rocky sides". The repetition seems to hold within it the chanting quality and the repetition of the lapping of the waves itself: hypnotic, terrifying, and yet peaceful.
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