Wailing roots
and paining shoots
risk the stem
that sways
for a collapse
leaves shed tears
turn yellow on flying years
flowers droop
as if they were icecream cups
fully empty and scooped
fruits are emaciated and stunted
like they were forced to grow
almost ready to fall
after a small bloom and bow
the shade slants more than expands
tired traveller feels the pain chemicals
wafting and mixing in vegetation clime
as he sets foot on the underneath wet slime
now he rests, collects and stands
what a tree this is !
and tomorrow will it be!
he mulls and thinks.
Ever youthful and fertile mother earth wails and chaffes as her another son is going to die and be with her as dust again!
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and tomorrow will it be!
he mulls and thinks.
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the words you've choosen here are powerful
the imagery is wonderful and enjoyable,,,, thanks for sharing
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you have some great words written down.
my suggestion is coma's and periods :]
i feel that with coma's its makes the way it rolls of the tongue to be easier and with more expression then without.
but that is just me -
Wow... so much darker and depressing than I even expected - but very well written. Love the imagery and metaphors. Truly beautiful writing here.
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Bravo
Wailing roots
and paining shoots
risk the stem
that sways
for a collapse
leaves shed tears
turn yellow on flying years
i love the imagery in these lines, very well written.
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I love the beginning. Very good images and word choices. I'm glad to see you "branching" out. Beautifully penned.
Sharon -
flowers droop
as if they were ice cream cups
fully empty and scooped
fruits are emaciated and stuntedI love these lines and the way you penned such beautiful foliage in a stunning array of metaphors duplicating such beauty in words.. Hugs always Angel♥
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very beautiful! I am glad i popped by
love and blessings
Rend
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I compare this to the death of a human: Wailing roots, paining shoots.
Ready to fall. Nicely written. Mulling over your words.....
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This is good and has nice flow and heart. well done
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I love pieces on nature. Good write.
Sharon
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This was so beautiful, I really enjoyed reading it. =}
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A powerful outlook on nature. Very strongly written with fabulous imagery. Very good.
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hot diggity dog! --sad, but natures way .......
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